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Yellow Fingernails by ~Deathstarr:iconDeathstarr:



She said the stars were falling
but she was unsure
of how long it would take.

(She was one of those girls,
forgetting the most important details,
unable to grasp the depth
of the problem.)

And maybe somewhere
(deep inside),
she was JEALOUS of
all those girls with their
razor-head boyfriends
(who threw up to be rockstars).


  She painted her fingernails YELLOW,
  inhaling the fragrance of
  peach liquor and a hint of sweat.

He said he watched her
through the window
(which was her favorite window),
where he seduced her because
he knew she was weak.

  She had promised the month of May:
  she'd given up his high,
  she'd forgotten, and gotten over those withdrawls
  (and she wasn't lonely).

What May didn't know
was that she'd surrender her integrity
(any day),
for one last taste
of that addiction.

But she never even realized,
  she could never
  keep a secret from May
  (forever).
©2005-2009 ~Deathstarr
:icondeathstarr:

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:iconselfincontact:
What May didn't know
was that she'd surrender her integrity
(any day),
for one last taste
of that addiction.


i love this one :clap: perhaps i would do that too... :aww:


i think this is a very personal poem,with a lot of "hidden" meanings... it makes us wonder what exactly do you mean by these words...

beautiful! :D

***:hug:

--
"Life without reflection isn't worth living" - Socrates
:iconglarawen:
"all those girls with their
razor-head boyfriends
(who threw up to be rockstars)."

That's such a great line. I like this, I think it gets a little weak around the end, but I do really like it. Great job.

--
Fuck me harder. No harder. Make me cry.
:iconqwithoutau:
Oh..wow. I love this. It makes sense to me..May...such a telling month. The piece is honest, but in a way that only we could understand...it makes you feel like the member of some sort of exclusive club, because everyone will read it differantly.

well done

I'd like to do a song about it, if you'll let me.

--
Freshman year =QwithoutaU



...Was too long ago...
:icondeathstarr:
I'm glad you caught on to the extent of it's depth...very many "hidden" meanings and it's so great to know you...understood. Thanks much for the comment, I'm glad you enjoyed! <3

--
the sun in the trees made the skyline look like crooked teeth.
:icondeathstarr:
Thanks so much for commenting...That was my favorite part aswell...As for the end, DEFINITLY gets weak around the end, maybe I'll work on that...But I'm glad you enjoyed it! <3

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the sun in the trees made the skyline look like crooked teeth.
:icondeathstarr:
Oh gosh! Well I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thatnks much for commenting! I agree, everyone will interpret this in their own perspective...If you'd like to do a song, go right ahead! I'm glad I inspired you! <3

--
the sun in the trees made the skyline look like crooked teeth.
:iconselfincontact:
you're welcome... :nod:

:hug:***

:cuddle:

--
"Life without reflection isn't worth living" - Socrates
:iconcalliopeslilly:
I just reread it and realized 'the stars were falling' can refer to movie/rock stars...this is beautiful. Edgy, dirty, great diction. Harsh. It does get a bit...not necessarily weak, but the mood/focus? changes. I love where your writing is going and how it's matured. Lovin' it, keep dAing this stuff.

--
To be great is to be misunderstood.
:iconraveness17:
Oh, my goodness... I'm honestly speechless. I'd try to tell you my favourite part, but I honestly can't. It just kind of grabbed onto me and kept me reading 'til the end. I like it -- ALOT!

--
I put my fear on the ground;
I steady my trembling.

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